• Do you need help with your manuscripts?

    Do you want an expert to have a look at your story and help you improve it?

    You've come to the right place! I'm here to help you make your manuscript better.

  • About me

    Crime & Thriller Author | Novel Critic

    Heena Rathore P.

    Author of Deceived

    Heena Rathore Pardeshi is a novelist, novel critic, as well as a book reviewer. She is also an ace social media strategist and an acclaimed YouTube Podcaster. An award-winning writer, she has won several NaNoWriMos and JuNoWriMos since 2014.

    A fan of crime-thrillers, apocalyptic fiction and slasher movies and series, she draws inspiration from the works of legendary writers such as Stephen King, Dean Koontz and Sidney Sheldon.
    Heena is twenty-five years old and lives in Pune, India with her beloved husband, Vishal – a successful entrepreneur, in a house full of books, music, and love. Heena passionately creates vivid fictional worlds; some to read and cherish, and some to live in.

  • Novel Critique Overview

    Novel Critique provides an insight into your novel/manuscript. It will identify the areas in your novel that need improvement and the ones that need rewrites or revisions.

    It will be provided to you in the form of a Critique Report. In this report, there'll be a chapter-by-chapter critique of all the elements listed below.


    • Plot continuity and clarity issues
    • Plot consistency issues
    • Believability issue
    • Plot non-linearity
    • Potential plot-holes

    Story Structure

    • Possible structural flaws 
    • Structure related loopholes. 
    • Consistency issues
    • Story progression

    Pacing & Tension

    • Pacing buit-up
    • Trimming off unnecessary elements which lag the story.
    • Tension built-up in scenes & chapters


    • Problems with the main character arcs.
    • Problems with the secondary characters.
    • The potential weaknesses in their personalities.
    • Internal Conflicts
    • Overall general impressions of each character.


    • Dialogues coming off natural or forced?
    • Do they go with the personality of the  characters?
    • Elimination of unnecessary dialogues.
    • Does the scene need additional dialogues to get the point across?


    • Does the story start with an intriguing conflict?
    • Does the protagonist have his/her own inner conflicts?
    • How does the major conflict help the plot?
    • Its effect on the overall story progression.


    • POV shifts and consistency issues
    • Unintended POV slips
    • Whether the Narration/POVs do justice to the characters?

    Writing & Voice

    • Is the writing style unique?
    • Does it go along well with the story?
    • Is the voice of the author fresh or derivative?
    • Overall impressions

    Scenes & Chapters

    • How is the transition from one scene to another?
    • How is the transition from one chapter  to another?


    • How does the story's beginning come across?
    • Whether it's interesting or offputting?


    • Was the ending satisfactory and/or shocking or surprising.
    • Unintentional loose-ends.


    • 'Show-tell' issues and places exactly where these issues arise.
    • Timeline consistency throughout the book
  • View A Dummy Critique Report

    Wonder how my critique report of your book will look like?

  • How does it work?

    My work style is simple and hassle free...

    Book a Critique

    Book a date and make the advance payment


    After receiving all the details of your manuscript/novel, I'll provide you a quote depending upon the page count and genre of your story and, once you approve it, I'll book the next available date to start working on your novel.

    If you have a specific date in mind, then no worries, we can always work something out.

    Chill out

    Let me work my magic on your manuscript and make it better


    Once you make the advance payment of 50% by the decided date, I'll start working on your story.

    It takes me 15-25 days to work on a manuscript/novel and prepare my Critique Report.

    Please note that the timeframe depends on the length of your novel.

    Receive the Report

    Get the detailed Critique Report and make all the changes


    After you make the payment for the remaining 50% of the fees, I'll hand over the Critique Report to you in your preferred format.

    The digital report will be e-mailed to you and the physical report will be snail-mailed to you.

    Please note that you'll have to bear the cost of shipping in case of the physical report.


    Once you've made my suggested changes, you can request a quick revision.


    After you've made the changes, I'll be happy to read the book again and provide revisions wherever necessary. Revision takes 2 weeks and is done for additional 25% of the fees.

    Revision is recommended only if you've made at least 50% of the changes I suggested in my Critique Report.

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